Wednesday, March 08, 2023

Refocusing a lede

 In the rush on breaking news, we often get our syntactical feet tangled up. Happens to all of us.

Here's a lede that could use rework.

-- Have police been violating rights only following the investigation?

-- Is the Justice Department the most important thing?

LOUISVILLE, Ky. (AP) — The U.S. Justice Department has found Louisville police have engaged in a pattern of violating constitutional rights following an investigation prompted by the fatal police shooting of Breonna Taylor.

Perhaps this as one possibility?

LOUISVILLE, Ky. (AP) — Louisville police have consistently violated constitutional rights, the U.S. Justice Department says after an investigation prompted by the fatal police shooting of Breonna Taylor.

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